For those of you who read
my contribution to the Kiss fest in December, this is a piece that takes place a bit earlier in the story-- I might as well admit that cutting these scenes was so horribly agonizing that I had to go ahead and start putting together a sequel at once. They were too good to give up entirely.
Go on to
Frankie's blog to surf through the rest of the contributions for the No-kiss fest!
There's some background already in the scene--Eve (the woman through whom we are witnessing this event) is married to Garrit DeLeon.
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And then Sarah swooned, because Lars decided he liked her best of all...
ReplyDeleteVery nice, Amalia! Nice tension, nice scene. :)
Hahaha!
ReplyDeletedo you have room for him in your new house? Because he takes up a lot of space--he's been crowding out my apartment for months... Just be careful what you wish for ;)
Ohlala! I love that last bit!
ReplyDeleteI want to participate in the No-Kiss Fest, but I don't think I have any non-kiss scenes. I thought I did, but I deleted them ages ago.
Sigh.
Nice tension and layers. I'm intrigued!
ReplyDeleteNice line about the horses having complex lineage--it tells a lot about Garrit. And the scene with Lars is so intense. I'm very intrigued with the overlapping layers of this story.
ReplyDeleteStephanie-- What is this delete you speak of?!
ReplyDeleteLaurel and Tricia: Thanks!
Oooo, very sigh-worthy! "I'm yours..." *heaving big sigh* Great job!!! This sounds like such an interesting story!
ReplyDeleteyour writing is beautiful!
ReplyDeleteThat was excellent. My head is spinning with questions now and I want more! Well done you!
ReplyDeleteThank you for sharing and I hope you don't mind that I'm following your blog now. I love connecting with other writers.
Sherrinda: that's one of my favorite lines, too.
ReplyDeleteAsh: thanks!
Shannon: I don't mind at all! I'm thrilled! Thanks for reading!
Great writing and very intriguing scene. And love some of the names of your characters. :)
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I love the tension in this scene :) I definitely want to know more about the characters.The last bit is very intriguing. Love it!
ReplyDeleteThere is plenty of room for Lars to come and live with me. You can help him pack up his bags, so he comes faster.
ReplyDeleteLovely scene. The last part was the best!
ReplyDeleteSarah: I just died laughing. I'll let him know there's an open invitation for him elsewhere. :P
ReplyDeleteKaren: Which ones?
Bethany and V.S.: Thanks!
Ooooooooooooh soooo good! And the ending, wow!! Loved it!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for participating and helping to make this day special!
Oh yes this is too good to be cut! Love it, sigggh!!
ReplyDeleteI'm yours says it all, and you totally grabbed me with the everything went dark at the end. More please!
ReplyDelete"I'm yours." Talk about double meaning!
ReplyDeleteThanks for sharing, that was great.
Wow! I really want to find out what happens next:)
ReplyDeletemarvelous scene ! i love the tension (:
ReplyDeleteVery, very well done. Nice scene. You have an unmistakable talent. Can't wait for you to be published!
ReplyDeleteThanks Everyone!
ReplyDeleteYou have such a way of bringing the reader into your world. Good job!
ReplyDeleteOh, that completely sucked me in. I'm not sure I understood everything--obviously there is some history behind much of it--but that was very satisfying.
ReplyDeleteI love the layers to this scene and these characters! This was every bit as enjoyable as your Kissing Blogfest scene was.
ReplyDeleteLots of good stuff there.
ReplyDeleteConfused about the ending...makes me want to read more!
Good job!
I loved the "everything went dark" at the end...well done, and this isn't a genre I normally read!
ReplyDeleteGreat scene, but that last part HOOKED me! I wish there was more to read!!
ReplyDeleteGreat scene and great description!
ReplyDeleteLoved this scene! Especially the line "The way Thorin had looked at her. It was as though she was water and he had crossed a desert to find her." Just wow, it's one of those scenes you remember. Great Job!
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