Saturday, January 02, 2010

No-Kiss Blogfest! Let the UST rule!

For those of you who read my contribution to the Kiss fest in December, this is a piece that takes place a bit earlier in the story-- I might as well admit that cutting these scenes was so horribly agonizing that I had to go ahead and start putting together a sequel at once. They were too good to give up entirely.

Go on to Frankie's blog to surf through the rest of the contributions for the No-kiss fest!

There's some background already in the scene--Eve (the woman through whom we are witnessing this event) is married to Garrit DeLeon.

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31 comments:

  1. And then Sarah swooned, because Lars decided he liked her best of all...

    Very nice, Amalia! Nice tension, nice scene. :)

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  2. Hahaha!
    do you have room for him in your new house? Because he takes up a lot of space--he's been crowding out my apartment for months... Just be careful what you wish for ;)

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  3. Ohlala! I love that last bit!

    I want to participate in the No-Kiss Fest, but I don't think I have any non-kiss scenes. I thought I did, but I deleted them ages ago.

    Sigh.

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  4. Nice tension and layers. I'm intrigued!

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  5. Nice line about the horses having complex lineage--it tells a lot about Garrit. And the scene with Lars is so intense. I'm very intrigued with the overlapping layers of this story.

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  6. Stephanie-- What is this delete you speak of?!

    Laurel and Tricia: Thanks!

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  7. Oooo, very sigh-worthy! "I'm yours..." *heaving big sigh* Great job!!! This sounds like such an interesting story!

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  8. That was excellent. My head is spinning with questions now and I want more! Well done you!

    Thank you for sharing and I hope you don't mind that I'm following your blog now. I love connecting with other writers.

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  9. Sherrinda: that's one of my favorite lines, too.

    Ash: thanks!

    Shannon: I don't mind at all! I'm thrilled! Thanks for reading!

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  10. Great writing and very intriguing scene. And love some of the names of your characters. :)
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  11. I love the tension in this scene :) I definitely want to know more about the characters.The last bit is very intriguing. Love it!

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  12. There is plenty of room for Lars to come and live with me. You can help him pack up his bags, so he comes faster.

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  13. Lovely scene. The last part was the best!

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  14. Sarah: I just died laughing. I'll let him know there's an open invitation for him elsewhere. :P

    Karen: Which ones?

    Bethany and V.S.: Thanks!

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  15. Ooooooooooooh soooo good! And the ending, wow!! Loved it!

    Thank you so much for participating and helping to make this day special!

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  16. Oh yes this is too good to be cut! Love it, sigggh!!

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  17. I'm yours says it all, and you totally grabbed me with the everything went dark at the end. More please!

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  18. "I'm yours." Talk about double meaning!

    Thanks for sharing, that was great.

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  19. Wow! I really want to find out what happens next:)

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  20. marvelous scene ! i love the tension (:

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  21. Very, very well done. Nice scene. You have an unmistakable talent. Can't wait for you to be published!

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  22. You have such a way of bringing the reader into your world. Good job!

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  23. Oh, that completely sucked me in. I'm not sure I understood everything--obviously there is some history behind much of it--but that was very satisfying.

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  24. I love the layers to this scene and these characters! This was every bit as enjoyable as your Kissing Blogfest scene was.

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  25. Lots of good stuff there.
    Confused about the ending...makes me want to read more!
    Good job!

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  26. I loved the "everything went dark" at the end...well done, and this isn't a genre I normally read!

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  27. Great scene, but that last part HOOKED me! I wish there was more to read!!

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  28. Great scene and great description!

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  29. Loved this scene! Especially the line "The way Thorin had looked at her. It was as though she was water and he had crossed a desert to find her." Just wow, it's one of those scenes you remember. Great Job!

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